Genre: Mystery
Digital Book
ASIN #: B00AT10Z1M
Amazon Digital Services
120 Pages
$3.99 Amazon
December 24, 2012
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Harley Bowman is the sheriff of Quay County, New Mexico and someone is killing the innocent citizens of Tucumcari. Tucumcari is a small town with limited resources but Harley must find a way to stop the killer before more innocent people die.
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First off, I should have stopped at the blurb when "resources" was spelled "resourses," (I corrected it) but I kept reading anyway...
Saying that, if you read any further, please be aware that there are MAJOR SPOILERS, so if you don't want to know, please quit reading now. Thank you.
Saying that, first I would tell Mr. Hill that people do not say "you all". They say "y'all". If you're going to use the word (and he uses it often), at least get it right. Secondly, everyone talks 'robot speech'. By that, I mean they talk like this: "How are you? I am fine. We are here about the case. We are here to talk to you." Not, "I'm fine, we're here," etc. (To be fair, he sometimes does change to the normal way that people speak); and he repeats everyone's full name over and over. (Tim Bale said to tell you hi. I told Tim Bale you said hi. Tim Bale said to call him). That sort of thing. It really got annoying when he was using first and last name every single sentence, especially since no two people had the same first name. I honestly think he was just trying to build up his word count.
Plus, his sentences all read like this one: "Mrs. Jennings, I'm Sheriff Bowman. Do you feel well enough to talk to me for a few minutes?" Harley asked Mrs. Jennings. Didn't he just say he was talking to Mrs. Jennings? Do we need to be told twice?
When the murder is discovered, not only does he tell the facts of the case to the family of the person who found the body, he also tells the news media so it's all over the news, and questions everyone in town. I guess they're all suspects. And as far as I could tell, he hadn't even told the victim's family yet. I always thought you were supposed to withhold the victim's name until the family was informed, and not discuss the case while ongoing except with people who needed to know. I suppose everyone in town needed to know.
Also, as we know Harley is the sheriff, but his wife of 25 years cries every single time he leaves the house. Wouldn't she have some sort of self-control after all that time? And everyone (including children) in Tucumcari carry guns and know how to use them. What kind of town is this anyway? I've been there several times and never noticed any pistol-packing mamas. They also bring them out to show people every chance they get. (His wife has one in her purse, and another sheriff's wife waves hers around to let her husband know she'll be okay).
To top it off, there are soooo many words that need editing that it was really difficult to read. In one paragraph alone he lists this misspelling: Conchas, Chonchas; and later on calls it Choncas. See what I mean? Get a decent editor. Please.
Finally, the ending itself didn't make any sense. He went from the murder to something that didn't have anything to do with this book. It was about another one altogether. Really odd. At any rate, I won't be reading anything else from this author.
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Goodreads: https://www.goodreads.com/review/show/319095801
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